Grammar and Tense Edited

Learning from my mistakes, one at the time.

Misplaced modifier
Clauses modify the noun closest to the comma. In this sentence, he is confued not “the comforting smell.”

  • Though confused at first, the comforting smell of the dungeon and coolness of the air settled his nerves.
    Though confused at first, he found that the comforting smell of the dungeon and coolness of the air settled his nerves.

In this one, the vegetables can’t scratch his head

  • He eyed her plate of stir-fried vegetables, scratching his head.
    Scratching his head, he eyed her plate of stir-fried vegetables.

Verbs and Tenses

  • She watched him inhaled…
    She watched him inhale
  • He heard someone came running.
    He heard someone come running

Bad spelling

  • snake is not a good snack
  • a steak tastes better than a stake

Tend to use too many “then”
Replace it with “and” or to start a sentence. (might a habit from the old programming days)

  • Then from his nightstand…
  • From his nightstand…

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